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Shopping is dangerous because it makes people selfish and careless with money. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: Shopping is dangerous because it makes people selfish and careless with money. Do you agree or disagree?

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Shopping can be considered as a fatal since shopping usually causes various issues such as people’s health and financial issues. Therefore, I believe that shopping should be conducted in a careful consideration.
Shopping can damage people’s mind and health, because people can easily form a bad habit such as addiction or impulsive shopping habits. Frequent purchasing of goods lead to addiction and which is unstoppable regardless with the continuous external party’s assistant (parents, friends and colleagues). For example, many people suffer from shopping addiction and they seek for other people to stop their behaviour, but mostly it failed and people suffer from severe psychological disorder.
Shopping makes people selfish resulting from materialism. Persistent purchasing of goods can create emotional attachments to goods and that can lead to materialism. The financial matter would not matter once people put their emotions into the products. For instance, majority of children put their emotions into dolls or toys and they have a tendency to purchase goods related to those toys afterward.
Shopping can result in financial distress by impulsive and continuous purchasing of goods. Therefore, majority of shopaholic suffer from financial issues such as bankruptcy and bad credit ratings. In other words, people continue to buy goods even if they cannot afford those goods financially. According to the US science journal, about 86% of American people have purchased unnecessary products and 67% among those had a bad credit rating.
In conclusion, people can easily damage psychologically and physically due to forming a bad habit from shopping. Therefore, shopping is dangerous.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e conducted in a careful consideration. Shopping can damage people's mind a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6875 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98809486755 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55078125 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8711257261 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0666666667 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167484596517 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685314263211 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700408878741 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987669873672 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383553642998 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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