Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
To begin with my positive side, some countries are starting to implement that teenagers at their young age can have a part-time job that can help them to develop their skills and vast knowledge. Most of the available jobs offer to them is during summer break or after their school hours. By means of this, education still be their priority and cannot be suffered. Furthermore, this a good start to become independent to their family, but still with guidance and to build up their confidence and critical thinking. Additionally, teenagers know the value of hard-earned money and to spend it wisely.
there are obvious minor disadvantages that teenagers are facing dealing with it, as well as the parents. Usually parents want to focus their children in their education first, and later on to work on their desired profession after completing university. some of them believe that teenagers have a difficulty to do both going to work and at the same time studying. they think that if their child already earning money they will forget to study harder. Moreover, due to financial crisis teenagers going to work that against their will, at least to help their family for daily expenses and needs.
In my view, teenagers engaging to work in a lighter job aside from studying can help them to develop their skills, to know the importance of hard work and money. still school should be their first priority and never be forgotten. parents should always be there to guide them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, well, at least, as well as, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1226.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.904 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50751191423 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6606465079 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3076923077 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115589454973 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447954667668 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584238434738 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820527465005 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275063689396 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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