In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Nowadays, in some cultures, children are taught that everything is achievable if they work hard for it. This essay will discuss the upsides including children would be ambitious and despite of all the difficulties nothing will be impossible, along with the downsides that are the high pressure that my feel and the mental problems.
On the one hand, telling kids that they cannot achieve their goals unless they work hard has many pros. Firstly, this would boost the child’s ambition and they would always pursue more goals to achieve. Moreover, there self-confidence would be strengthed, so even if there are many obstacles they could tackle them if children are told that there is nothing impossible. For example, recent study shows are the hardest exams, children can pass them if they work hard.
On the other hand, despite of the aforementioned advantages, there are cones as well one is to be considered is the 23 might not handle divide pressure that is caused by these statements when a child exceeds their energy limit they would be very tired and exhausted. Furthermore, if they were told to work hard and they did not succeeded, this will cause many mental issues. For instance, it is believed by many scientists that failure could decrease this self-esteem that is one of the leading causes for the depression.
In conclusion, in some cultural backgrounds, children are instructed that working hard will lead to achieve every goal that they set. This essay discussed the advantages and the disadvantages of this phenomenon.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 41.998997996 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1293.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0905511811 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70645453496 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551181102362 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7711077722 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.545454545 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0909090909 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337087184992 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150623139303 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835774845467 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234749143748 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838084923356 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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