In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage

It's a natural phenomenon that every person has to overcome different phases of in order to secure a good position in their lives. Without hard work, people will not value their level where they seems to become. Some people argues that, if there perents teach their children from early phase, that doing hard work is the key to success, which will be very helpful in their further career. Although this encouragement might have some negative factors, This essay will discuss both the pros and cons of this statement.
First and foremost, doing hard work from early childhood would develop the habit of never giving up. As we can know that, after trying for several times if the things does not work properly then we tend to give up, but if we have habit of trying hard until it works, then this feeling give us strength to do even in the better way. For example, many well-known scientists have also worked hard for inventions like the bulb and so on; if they did not acquire such habits, then it would not be possible for them to invent such things. Moreover, working hard can keep people active. They do not get distracted easily. Trying hard can help with concentration. If a person has a rule of working smartly since their childhood, then they will be active in their work, even if the task is difficult or unfamiliar; they will continue until they achieve it.
On the other hand, the downsides include feelings of competition. Sometimes, children take it in negative form, and they develop the habit of being competent. They try to be the smart kid of their class, or they want to become the best employees of their company, and for that, they will do anything. Sometimes, to achieve the good position, they might do some negative activities like feelings of jealousy, being rude to their friends and so on. This type of action can harm them in their future careers. Similarly, even after trying hard, the work cannot goes as we think. After several times of working hard, we have to face failure and that situation make us week and we can get negative feelings like stress, and depression. For instance, if people give their 100 percent effort to complete the task and it does not work, that situation can put people in a serious condition.
In conclusion, parents have to show the right path to their children, they have to let their child to do everywork by themselves. Sometimes there suggestion can put kids in srious condition.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
Its a natural phenomenon that every person ...
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...e will not value their level where they seems to become. Some people argues that, if ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, similarly, so, then, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 428.0 315.596192385 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70560747664 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37258963749 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5123323922 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9047619048 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.380952381 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2476157115 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851271187181 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439530463336 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164378370666 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411817277864 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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