In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Essay topics:

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In recent years, the trend has been changed towards children. In many regions, people give advise to teenager that they able to do any task in the world if they put their whole efforts even though it looks imposible. In the course of the essay I will describe benefits and the drawbacks of this advise.
Nowadays, compition has been increased in children to young people. Most of the families and school advise to their children to improve their confidence. If a student believe that he is able to complete the task then student or children does hard work for it. Due to this the hard work will be part of his life which assisst in their future. For example, two children doing same perticular task, one of them know he is able to achieve success and other do not has confidence about that task. then its clear that children will complete first who believe on his ability. However, this advise not good for each children.
On the other hand, it has some negatives that can creats impact on children health. Numerous things which is out of range of children's ability, if children believe he is able to do imposible task then they work hard to do that, work day and night which can produce some long term diseases. For instance, if children read various book in childhood that impact on eye sight. In addition, due to his hard work habit, children will not social with pairmates.
In conclusion, this message improve children's confidence with help do hard things, while this hard work can create some health problems.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
... children. In many regions, people give advise to teenager that they able to do any ta...
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Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...efforts even though it looks imposible. In the course of the essay I will describe...
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Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...ribe benefits and the drawbacks of this advise. Nowadays, compition has been increas...
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Line 2, column 461, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...ble to achieve success and other do not has confidence about that task. then its cl...
^^^
Line 2, column 493, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
... do not has confidence about that task. then its clear that children will complete f...
^^^^
Line 2, column 584, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...o believe on his ability. However, this advise not good for each children. On the oth...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...arious book in childhood that impact on eye sight. In addition, due to his hard work habi...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1252.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68913857678 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30723770291 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535580524345 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 368.1 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0996620694 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4666666667 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294162912809 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104387571132 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529520151702 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20031927044 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397184547007 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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