In certain parts of the world, students are made to be learned a variety of subjects before they graduated, while others concentrate on the certain subjects when they are 15 years old. While all of these ideas could help students in some aspects, I maintain that focusing on some subjects instead of attending all of them is the most feasible option.
On the one hand, it is commonly acknowledged that learning all 13 subjects at school will bring students a solid foundation in all aspects of knowledge ranging from natural science(math, physic, chemistry) to social science( history, geography,...), thereby helping them to access various of knowledge. For example, Vietnamese students aiming at the engineering field are required to command math and physic, but the knowledge of English and computers they have acquired from the basic course can bring them an opportunity to have a better job in the international company when graduated compared to those don't have insight about foreign language an computer skill.
However, I believe that focusing on certain subjects will be largely beneficial to students as they will have more time to develop other purposes. This is because, when they don't have to study too much, there will be lesser pressure on them as well as more time to do more outdoor activities and relax with friends. Specifically, students are likely to develop their soft skills such as communication, teamwork, and cooking and maybe play more sports which not only as a way of improving their health and preventing a sedentary lifestyle caused by just staying in the back and studying but also make them become more active and all around. For another, concentrating on a certain subject in their field also assist students to enhance knowledge in those subject and get better academic performance without being stressed by overloading unnecessary subjects.
In conclusion, while studying a wide range of subjects allows students to have a basic background of all kinds of fields, I am convinced that focussing on certain subjects not only reduces the study burden on children but also contributing to make students more comprehensive and healthy. Hopefully, in the future, this learning model can be applied in more schools so that students can get a better environment to study and develop.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13527851459 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80303714152 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7232037913 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 193.6 106.682146367 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.7 20.7667163134 182% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330500024463 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144783076274 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765703320133 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219702136377 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704003444442 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 13.0946893788 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.78957915832 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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