Some people believe that physical fitness of strong individuals and teams is the reason for most sports achievements. Others, however, think that mental attitude is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is irrefutably true that achievements in the sports are the result of hard work, talent and strong commitment. However, some people say that physical fitness of sports players plays a key role to make massive accomplishments in the sports. By contrast, others claim mental attitude as the most salient factor behind sports achievements. Here, I would like to account for both sides with my own perception.
There are manifold points to endorse the former view. First and foremost, players with sound physical fitness can put their hundred percent efforts for the victory of their team. Their performance looks extraordinary when they are good at fitness. Taking a real life example into consideration, once in a cricket match, a top class batsman Hershel Gibbs was playing exceptionally well against India. His team was very close to victory but unfortunately, he got injured while running for a single. Later, he was unable to take singles and got out while playing a big shot. This turned his team to lose the final match by only two runs. Hence, achievements in the crucial matches and tournaments depend a lot on the physical fitness of best players. On the contrary, others have conflicting views.
They think that a robust mental attitude lays down the foundation of achievements in sports. Without strong mentality and positive attitude, making achievements seems a herculean task. To make it clear with one more real life example, South African cricket team is one of the best cricket teams in the world but they have never won any World Cup just because of less strong mental attitude or temperament. Many many times, it is noticed by the cricket fans and experts that the players of South Africa are unable to bear the pressure of big games and become mentally depressed under pressure situations. This results in quick loss of wickets and game over for African team. Consequently, mentally strong players are much needed to win awards in the sports.
To recapitulate, undeniably, physical fitness has it’s own importance. However, in my opinion, a positive mind set up with the passion to win brings a massive success in sports.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. the essay is not exactly right on the topic. Read the topic again and think why.
2. the structure is not exactly correct, you:
instruction
side A. one reason + one example
side B. one reason + one example
conclusion
a better way:
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side A. first, reason one; second, reason two.
side B. first, reason one; second, reason two.
conclusion
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1743 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.882 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.976 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.267 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.443 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 732, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
...ts depend a lot on the physical fitness of best players. On the contrary, others have c...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Many
... strong mental attitude or temperament. Many many times, it is noticed by the cricket fan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, so, well, while, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04761904762 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73527367929 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2955355823 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8095238095 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267346207108 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677642057324 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509410980452 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157741009583 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726904417422 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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