Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is convienced that a few person represent advertisement make people to purchase the product that they do not really need while others believed it could increase their lives. Personally, I am on the same way that commercial is only for encouraging many consumers.
In the one hand, there is a crucial reason to support my argument. Many reclames are over in offering the product especially in the effect of the good. It is because they have a selling target to avoid the loss while they do not care about the real result in life. For the model, many companies want to gain the anual target so they manage the advert kindly. In short, the benefit could be achieved by its way which is a creativity from the company.
Next, the incredible-displayed stuff is used by the enterprise to manipulate the buyer. It is due to the inhabitant tend to purchase the good having the highest value rather than usual. For instance, Samsung Company launched the foldable phone that is a new invention in the world and the most smartphone does not have its ability so it sales the upper number rather than another company whereas the function is same with another one. As result, making an antimainstream advertisement with the extraordinary product could increase the huge-profited selling that a few enterprises desire to reach.
Nevertheless, several negative impacts are gained if the inhabitant is not in the same line. Firstly, many people are fascinated to buy the product that it causes a high consumerism. It is caused by they want to be the first in their social lives. As proof, when iPhone Company released new product, several people desire to get it because they would show it to their friends and gain some kind words. It means, this activity does not have a useful function in the world. Secondly, this behavior could rise a huge-dangered rubbish in the country because of unproperly-bined trash to recycling some specific goods. For example, some persons would make a new trash every day because they always buy the stuff that offers on the TV. Furthermore, it would be creating an environmental pollution and damage the surroundings.
To sum up where my track, every person decision has an effect that would bring a good or bad situation so they have to consider it wisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: 'few people', 'few persons'.
Suggestion: few people; few persons
It is convienced that a few person represent advertisement make people to ...
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Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...y launched the foldable phone that is a new invention in the world and the most smartphone do...
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Line 4, column 820, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... pollution and damage the surroundings. To sum up where my track, every person d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in short, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85384615385 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83573514628 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1445353356 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.65 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153263477998 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427144435973 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422018412157 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839231870569 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464945611196 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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