Some people say it is OK to use animals for our benefit others say it is not good to expliot them Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people say it is OK to use animals for our benefit, others say it is not good to expliot them. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Beasts have a lot of advantage to encourages human life and hence very essential to conserving every beasts in the world from extinction. In my opinion, beasts holding a big role to underpin each activities in earth.
In other words, i agree that human and beasts must be side by side for keeping equilibration of our nature. For example, when someone very obsessed with beasts in the forest they will destroy all beasts, the consequence of this condition is the population of beasts will be decreasing and our reserve being disappear even the big impact from this condition can stop the chain of beasts food such as killing a snake that can make the population of mouse increasing, ultimately all peasant will be adverse because the mouse eating rice as the results each peasant failed to harvest their rice. Moreover, human should be focus for make balancing of beasts ecosystem because if being enhancement amount of beasts extinct the circumstances of earth not stable. Therefore, as a human we must care about beasts life not only thinking about our necessary like our consumption, but we should know how to keeping equilibrium between beasts and human.
Furthermore, several human assume that killing some of beasts nothing impact for the earth or life. Whereas, vanishing of beasts will make the forest more narrow than before and the effect is nothing fresh weather that we can accept. Some people have a pattern of think that if we only killing a bit of beasts no problem, but the fact is day by day people have a higher obsess to creating the best way for surviving their life without thinking another population such as animal even they cut off trees in the forest for vasting the path of transportation and finally total of beasts more than degenarated until appear some asymmetry of ecosystem.
To conclude, i belive that all activities on the world should be balanced between beasts and human as the results will be being comfortable to two creature in this earth.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...h activities in earth. In other words, i agree that human and beasts must be sid...
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Line 2, column 618, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'focused', 'focussed'?
Suggestion: focused; focussed
...t their rice. Moreover, human should be focus for make balancing of beasts ecosystem ...
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Line 3, column 48, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the beasts') or simply say ''some beasts''.
Suggestion: some of the beasts; some beasts
...more, several human assume that killing some of beasts nothing impact for the earth or life. W...
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Suggestion:
...g impact for the earth or life. Whereas, vanishing of beasts will make the forest...
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Line 4, column 148, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'creature' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'creatures'.
Suggestion: creatures
...esults will be being comfortable to two creature in this earth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, for example, such as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86390532544 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58122488239 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502958579882 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.195276412 49.4020404114 264% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 164.4 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8 20.7667163134 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3 7.06120827912 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0846576132577 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447079186819 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490313581375 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0459976005346 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378822534057 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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