In contemporary times, most parents all around the world want to make their children self-dependent and teach them the basic rules of life. Therefore, they encourage their children to work in their free time, especially when they are teenagers. Some people go against this idea because they think that they should spend their leisure time resting and refreshing themselves. In the following paragraphs, both views will be discussed and finally, my opinion will be given.
On the one hand, part-time jobs will make the children more self-dependent and increase their confidence. According to sociologists, teenagers are the golden age of every man’s life. At this age, they become more energetic and enthusiastic which helps them to learn the basic principle of life. It also helps to improve their communication skills. For example, when a young person works in a grocery shop he has to deal with different customers which will improve his management skills and also communication. Early entry into the job sector will help to bring maturity in their behavior. For this reason in America, most parents send their children to do a job when they are 14 for improving their confidence and introducing them to this competitive world.
On the other hand, children should do more study in order to acquire more knowledge about technology and other subjects, therefore in the leisure hour, they should take a rest and refresh themselves. After school, doing a part-time job will create extra pressure which will hamper their academic career. In spite of being doing a part-time job, the students should use that time for relaxation, so that in the evening they can give full attention to their study.
In conclusion, extracurricular activities are needed for the young stars to be mature. In addition, they need physical and mental repose for doing regular studies. From my side, I can say both are needed but the parents should help them so that they can keep a balance between the tasks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08536585366 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70692564738 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55487804878 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9195104578 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1176470588 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313130391755 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936298155469 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536369764304 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18028188388 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660939585298 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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