Some people say that what children watch influences their behaviour. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behaviour most. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
Nowadays, television has had sufficient impacts on children’s action. While people believe that the length of time young people spending on watching television has great effects on them, I would argue that the content of TV programmes affects more on the way youngsters behave.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why sitting in front of screen for a long time affects to children’s behaviour. The first one is that by keeping their eyes glued to screen for several hours, young people can easily become overly reliant on TV shows for entertainment. If children have this habit, in a long run it is possible for them to neglect their engagement in outdoor activities which may lead them to a sedentary lifestyle and a detrimentally physical health. Secondly, because of excessive attention to television, the youth can have a reduction on interaction with their families and friends. As a result, they can be isolated from the real world and even become a victim of autism.
On the other hand, I believe that broadcasted images can have more direct effects on young viewers’ behaviour. Firstly, children are not mature enough to distinguish between right and wrong so that they can simply expose themselves to counter-educational programmes which might contain misconception and inappropriate behaviour to young people. For example, violence in some movies can show poor examples for the youth, therefore they may have the potential of committing crimes in the future. In addition, unwary viewers can be easily swayed by captivating advertisements which target audience including children. Consequently, preschoolers will pester their parents to buy these products impulsively.
In conclusion, although both the amount of time and the content of television have significant impacts on the action of young people, it seems to me that children have been more affected by what they see on television.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33114754098 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09908049579 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586885245902 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7185061285 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.076923077 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224221197493 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759194984089 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399406386262 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139791935429 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120899659873 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.