Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree?

The rigorous investment from the government is important to determine the direction for the country developing. Someone claims that the budget for arts promoting should be taken and invested in others. I absolutely agree with this statement and I will express my own views.
To begin with, the result of arts investing may not effective. Nowadays, there are several entertainments for us, such as the telephone’s application, the number of art lover is less than the past due to the abundant life. Therefore, even if the government desires to promote arts, to develop culture, it is not helpful since people are not interested in this boring activity. So, the government should spend money on popular interest carefully. For instance, as far as the public are tended to own a hobby on doing exercise in the fitting room, the government should encourage more people to participate in this activity, to prompt the healthy atmosphere. As a result, arts should not be the superior and government may follow the public’s interest to expend an appropriate investment.
Likewise, arts learning is not practical. As soon as the official aims to enhance local culture, the social need should be completed first. As soon as people search for a job, which would not require the professional knowledge of arts. In contrast, all companies hope the worker to own some practical knowledge, like the engineering skills or first-aid certificate. Hence, before developing arts culture, the professional skills of the public should be care first. Otherwise, people may find work difficult.
In conclusion, since arts is not the compulsory part of social life, I strongly reckon that government should concern the public need rather than the arts culture developing.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cared'?
Suggestion: cared
...essional skills of the public should be care first. Otherwise, people may find work ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, likewise, may, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24113475177 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96095680956 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2504960291 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.375 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200290382071 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643059931612 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300238726735 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113368020327 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383348653288 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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