Many people argue that nowadays upbringing of children is greatly affected by the media they are exposed to and the company they keep. However, others are of the opinion that family is still the foremost factor that determines a child's development. Wile both sides have convincing arguments, I believe social factors like TV and friends have largely replaced parental influence.
Those who think familial impact being more important proclaim that parents and siblings are first mentors for the children. Kids start looking up to them from early childhood so this form of pedagogy begins far before they can indulge in media commodities or socialize with other kids. Thus, values instilled by parents single-handedly become a part of their conscious as well as sub-conscious personalities. Moreover, it is argued that kids are most receptive in first years of their lives and adapt to their surroundings conveniently. Since most of that time is spent in parental supervision, it is possible for parents to tweak traits to children according to their own customs before without interference from external factors.
However, I believe that nowadays children are more prone to teachings delivered to them by technology and society. To begin with, a fast-paced life has made parents occupied with plethora of career goals. This results in most of their time being spent in workplaces rather than with their offspring. An adult in America, for instance, spends an average of nine hours per day in office often without even a decent lunch break. This hectic schedule does not allow working father and mother to give sufficient attention to their children. Consequently, kids become more attached to electronic devices like TV or social groups learning important life lessons from them instead of their family. In addition to this peer pressure plays a significant role nowadays because kids are more prone to adapting habits from their age fellows. Finally, an increase in smart phones and iPad ownership among younger age group has also added to the trend of social factors influencing upbringing of children. Hence, screen time has increased due to easy accessibility of technological devices where online music and TV channels can be streamed. Therefore, these hefty figures clearly prove that parental influence over personality development of children has plummeted significantly and external factors like TV and peers have become new tutors of the younger ones.
To sum it up, although some people still think family holds most power when it comes to teaching values to younger generation, I believe this perception is rather fallacious. In reality, things like friends and media have become main stakeholders in deciding set of characteristics that will manifest in a young fellows. Therefore, it is not surprising to predict that in near future social factors will cater spiritual needs and parental roles will be solely limited to providing children with materialistic things only.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2514.0 1615.20841683 156% => OK
No of words: 473.0 315.596192385 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31501057082 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79525702255 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 176.041082164 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566596194503 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 506.74238477 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3466640011 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.714285714 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5238095238 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52380952381 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159821419889 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469677726827 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559024475977 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112245996842 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645381615861 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 78.4519038076 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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