Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to
entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums
is to educate.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this modern and technological era, where people are engulfed under the immense impact of the latest innovations and technical gadgets, museums come as a rescuer to connect them with the forgotten history. In this context, the school of thought that museums should only be limited to educate people is often argued by others in the favor of entertainment factors. This essay would endeavor to shed some light on numerous factors behind this mentality, followed by my personal opinion.
To begin with, it is an irrefutable fact that our current generations are growing in an advanced era. So, in order to facilitate them with the knowledge of eminent warriors, accompanied by their heroic deeds, museums play a pivotal role in achieving this goal. For instance, every year, the governments are spending a valuable proportion of the budget to keep this treasure alive. Besides this, researchers, students, and explorers avail a chance to expand their quest from this indispensable resource.
By contrast, a section of society believes that museums should be meant for enjoyment purposes, with an infusion of the latest technology. While the encrypted history in the form of symbols and statues arouse enervate feelings, an amalgamation of traditional and modern styles will make it more catchy for the visitors. For example, introducing augmented reality to present historical wild-life and related history to give a real-time 3D experience to visitors. Despite being entertained, the crowd will get enlightened with rich knowledge while improving participation.
To conclude, although views on the efficacy of museums as knowledge enhancer or fun factor vary largely among the masses, however, in my opinion, it is erroneous to restrict it to serve only one purpose. I believe that adding a spark of pleasure is highly synonymous with the enriched knowledge experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38644067797 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91660591447 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637288135593 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8323117353 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.230769231 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206069701929 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660688397064 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07544586206 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11285360665 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688675106018 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.56 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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