Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease governments should make efforts in reducing environmental pollution and housing problems To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Undoubtedly, the increase in pollution is a major threat to human beings in the form of diseases.
A few of individuals concerned that government should make some attempts to reduce environmental pollution and housing problems. I largely agree with this perspective because the life of human beings is depend on environment and housing.
On the one hand, there are many reasons of making efforts in reducing environmental pollution and housing problem. Firstly, people can inhale fresh air. To be more precise, if the pollution in the environment is less then people can easily breath especially older people who are suffering breathing problems due to the pollution in the environment. Thus, inhaling fresh air plays an important role in making people free from diseases. Secondly, housing difficulties are also main reason for making masses unhealthy. To elaborate, due to urbanization more and more people tend to move towards urban areas, it increases the population in urban regions which then put pressure on the resources of cities, then people would have to suffer problems like shortage of food and poor quality of water, which impact their health. Resultantly, housing problems should be reduced to make a person healthy.
In contrast, doing some efforts regarding environment and housing is not the only way to prevent people from the illness and disease, government should also improve the medical facilities. In other words, if the medical technologies are advanced in such a level that it can give the treatment of every disease very easily, then we can easily say that humans are prevented from illness. Hence, government should focus on improving medical facilities to makeing human's life healthy.
To conclude, although government should improve the medical facilities, but, I think doing efforts for reducing pollution from environment and housing obstacles are major factors which prevent people from different diseases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, i think, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41447368421 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.792575237 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0916697666 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.571428571 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372005726542 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135483621876 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938084347966 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195861402864 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849803871037 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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