Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe children who are taught to cooperate becomes more useful adult.

Essay topics:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe children who are taught to cooperate becomes more useful adult.

The idea of what children should be taught is highly controversial among individuals. While some people are of the opinion that a child should learn how to compete, others suggest that cooperation is more beneficial when they grow into an adult. In my opinion, I agree with the latter view because it promotes team work. This essay will analyze both view and give reasons for my assertion.

There are diverse reasons why people argue that competition should be taught. One of it being that children perform better when challenged. In othe words, competition motivates them to work harder. Also, it enhances their prowess as they tend to learn fast under pressure. A good illustration is the attitude of the young one during a school race competition, they maximize their their strengths to enables them win against all odds. These children are more confident and less dependent as and adult. However, they have poor relationships with people later in life and are self centered.

In contrast to this , coöperation is considered to allow children work in harmony which i agree. As such, they are capable od maintaining cordial relationship with their colleagues and possess good sense of belongings as adults. They exchange ideas and learn from one another in the process of working together. Therefore, they are able to function well in a team as adults.

In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned views, it is evident evident that children achieve more when they work together. In my opinion, togetherness should be encouraged among children as this aids them to function optimally among their peers.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2319391635 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.776688262 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58174904943 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2156631247 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9411764706 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4705882353 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250096460591 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815241633731 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084636543439 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1528271301 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651939230909 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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