Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is undoubtedly true that the world we are living in is extraordinarily competitive and fast-changing. Therefore, several people these days supports the idea that children should be encouraged to gain a sense of competition for their own sake. Nevertheless, numerous others, including me, found that learn to co-operate with each other have much more advantageous impacts on the growth of a child
On the one hand, there is a variety of explanations for fostering a sense of competition deep inside the child. One fundamental benefit may lie in the motivation of this mental ability. It does not seem unreasonable to suggest that this sense definitely provoke children to try every possible effort to success, thereby, allowing them to accomplish more achievement when they are in their adulthood. By the way of exemplifying, in order to surpass the others and ranked first in the class, pupils are demanded to horn their skill and enrich their in-depth academic knowledge, which offers them an opportunity to analyse things more profoundly. Nevertheless, the sense of competition may be misinterpreted from its original meanings, which arouse children to find alternative means of winning at all cost, including cheating.
From my perspective, the ability to work cooperatively play a decisive role in turning children into more well-rounded adults. The first and foremost justification is that the institutionalization results in the majority of modern occupations considered team-working as one of the prerequisites. It is particularly significant that working individually witnessed a downward trend since most people nowadays belong to a company or enterprise. An illustration of this is that a business project often requires the concerted effort not only from not only among employees themselves in a particular office but also in connection with other relevant departments. Hence, learning the proper way to collaborate is extremely essential for the forthcoming career of a youngster.
In conclusion, despite the fact that the sense of competition may foster the motivation to learn and to try their best, the merits of collaborating should not be underestimated since it is one of the top requirement in modern society
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41954022989 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37659207273 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.5160384115 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.076923077 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7692307692 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194576971692 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619690902137 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688741583011 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12154405527 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721295993263 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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