Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sociologist and civil societies often make a debate about the growing education of children, whether they should learn to compete or cooperate, which would have a broader impact in their life and society as a whole. I would like to discuss both the views critically in the following essay.
Parents and teachers often emphasize on teaching the kids to learn how to compete and try to win over others. This is particularly intended to teach a children to be more success and productive in life. It also has broader impact in life; for example, more competitive childs are likely to survive more better than others in both professional and personal life. It helps to create a zest that children can use to be more success and make prosperity in their professional career. That helps to exert a favorable situation in their professional environment and helps them to be stand out in the society.
On the other hand, many people emphasize on teaching children to be cooperative rather than competitive. This is because; teaching children to be competitive might have a negative impact in psychology which would create harmful effect in society. For example, if a children learn to compete others for having a good career, if he or she can't do it in traditional way, they might want to get it by any means that would destabilize that social order. Rather, teaching children being cooperative would create many problems in our society. Particularly the corruption could be reduced to a significant level which is assumed to be the bad impact of teaching children about the value of the wealth and career and tempting them to earn those by competitiveness. Which ultimately persuade them committing corruption. If children’s are learned to be cooperative and moral, then they would value the happiness out of helping someone instead of stealing money by illegal means during their professional life.
I personally feel that, it is necessary to teach children about the moral ethics, social norms, cooperativeness and sharing basic things with others, but they also should get some competitive mind. Otherwise, our society would not be ameliorated gradually and it would be stalled at a certain point that no one would feel any urgency to improve it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a child; children
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Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ompetitive childs are likely to survive more better than others in both professional and pe...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elps them to be stand out in the society On the other hand many people emphasize ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...armful effect in society For example if a children learn to compete others for having a go...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: cants
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...gal means during their professional life I personally feel that it is necessary t...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'norms'' or 'norm's'?
Suggestion: norms'; norm's
... children about the moral ethics social norms cooperativeness and sharing basic thing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93833780161 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7866127653 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469168900804 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 373.0 20.2975951904 1838% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1842.0 106.682146367 1727% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 373.0 20.7667163134 1796% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 55.0 7.06120827912 779% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234130291723 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.234130291723 0.084324248473 278% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147308197225 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363008029726 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 188.3 13.0946893788 1438% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -307.12 50.2224549098 -612% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 148.8 11.3001002004 1317% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.85 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.14 8.58950901804 293% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 9.78957915832 572% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 151.2 10.1190380762 1494% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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