In the present day, many people believe that zoos are useful place where endanger wild animals could be protected. While, there are more compelling reasons why zoos are cruel and people should close them down and release all the animals back to the nature.
On the one hand, zoos could be considered as useful place to protect wild animals from extinction. The primary reason is that animals that live in zoos are protected from all the thread in the wildlife that caused by human. Each year, there are thousand wild animals are killed by hunter, hit by vehicle, or died because of rubbish that spoiled by human. Moreover, zoos provide food, water and safe living space for all of their animal that couldn’t be found anywhere else in the nature. To be more specific, let’s take a look at millions of animals in the wildlife that are slowly dying because of deforestation, pollution and wild hunting and we might see that how good animals in zoos are protected.
On the other hand, there are more compelling reasons why zoos are cruel, and people show close them down and release all the animals. First of all, living in zoos, where every thing from food, water and living space are prepared by human, wild animal will lose their natural instincts. Since every thing are ready, wild animals don’t have to hunting or looking for food, many of them just lie down there and wait to be feed, that could make them suffer from obesity. Another reason is that: there are a significant number of zoos that place their animals into small cages comparing to the animal size. This can lead to many problems such as distressed, depression as well as physical pain for those animals that used to live freely in the wildlife.
In conclusion, while some animals are being protected from many threads in the environment thanks to zoos, there’re more significant reason to believe that zoos are cruel and should be closed down.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...t caused by human. Each year, there are thousand wild animals are killed by hunter, hit ...
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Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'reasons'?
Suggestion: reasons
...anks to zoos, there’re more significant reason to believe that zoos are cruel and shou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79279279279 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23829106325 2.80592935109 80% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474474474474 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.3190456242 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.769230769 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6153846154 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373936761193 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160008806686 0.084324248473 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860206754102 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287299998459 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567684260075 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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