Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
Many people argue that zoos should be shut down as a matter of animals rights, while others suppose they are of paramount importance in conserving wild species. In my point of view, although zoos can bring in some shortcomings to the wildlife, their advantages on animal preservation should receive much attention
On the one hand, since being kept in captivity, animals are deprived of freedom, thus losing their basic instincts. Specifically, caging animals in small spaces along with providing them food everyday can deter them from their natural habitat. Gradually, certain skills of wild animals like predating, escaping or searching for fruits will die out. Also, some animals find it extremely challenging to get acquainted with the staring of tourists or their cameras’ flash. By and large, when being kept in zoos, animals will have to suffer from a myriad of troubles, which can be considered to be unethical or immoral for them
On the other hand, zoos play an indispensable role in protecting endangered species. Recently, there has been so many scientific reports about species being on the verge of extinction and unable to sustain in their natural environment because of the over-interference of humans to the nature. For example, loads of pandas can not find food and reproduce because of the massive loss of bamboo trees in many areas as a results of industrialization. As a result, zoos apper with a mission of rescueing these animals by providing them with suitable conditions and breeding them as well
To conclude, although both school of thoughts are true to a certain extent. I strongly believe if being operated properly, zoos can do many wonders to our ecosystem, consequently, their benefits should be taken into much thorough consideration
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
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Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'getting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: getting
...e animals find it extremely challenging to get acquainted with the staring of tourists...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...e loss of bamboo trees in many areas as a results of industrialization. As a result, zoos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18118466899 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.920105933 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613240418118 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1575018937 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.7 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287794282743 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110389392064 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820557435749 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184703368835 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607964682807 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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