Technology has changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
The role of technology is becoming increasingly significant in today's world. One of its applications is to serve children as an instrument for their leisure activities. I believe the drawbacks of the trend would overshadow its merits.
It is thought that technological advances offer kids with more entertaining activities and superior experience compared to traditional leisure time. The first advantage of utilization technical applications is that technology development fosters the popularity of other entertainment forms for the young. Given the invention of smart equipment and internet connection, music, movies, and games become accessible to the young enthusiasts at anytime and anywhere. In addition, children are also able to induce improved sound, visuals, and effects of online entertainment nowadays thanks to state-of-the-art equipment. Take games online as an example, new hardware designs allows young players play games with smoother, more vivid motions, while being able to communicate with other players from far away.
Apart from benefits, use of technology could be attributable to inactive lifestyle, which has many negative impacts upon young individuals. This can be linked directly to many common health issues these days including obesity, diabetes and cardiovascular diseases. Another downside of the sedentary lifestyle is that it places children at greator risk of posture deterioration. If children spend many hours playing games in the same posture, they would be placed at greator risk of spines' structures destruction, which lead to difficulties in their later work and life. Finally, excesesive exposure to telecommunication devices is one of the main culprits of anti-social behaviors among children. This stems from the fact that children, who spend long time using smartphones or computers, may lose the ability to get involved in face-to-face interactions, which prevent them from being sociable.
In sum, I concur with the view that disadvantages of technological advances would outweigh the advantages when it comes to kids entertainment. While young users of technology can have more options and enhanced experience, they physical and psychological health would be jeorpadised.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 124, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'kid'.
Suggestion: kid
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, thus, while, apart from, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7811550152 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23709490986 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632218844985 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1348366598 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.875 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184521460404 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555817919091 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475342810115 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106557324974 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026355273986 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.24 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.44 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.