Technology has changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
The role of technology is becoming increasingly significant in today's world. One of its applications is to serve children as an instrument for their leisure activities. I believe the drawbacks of the trend would overshadow its merits.
It is thought that technological advances offer kids more entertaining activities and superior experiences compared to traditional leisure time. The first advantage of technical applications is that technology development provides the young with various options of entertainment forms. Given the invention of the smart equipment and the internet connection, music, movies, and games become accessible to the young enthusiasts at any time and anywhere. In addition, children can also induce improved sound, visuals, and effects of online entertainment nowadays thanks to state-of-the-art equipment. Take games online as an example, new hardware designs supply young game players with smoother motion and more vivid images, while being able to communicate with other players from far away.
Apart from benefits, the use of technology could be attributable to an inactive lifestyle, which has many negative impacts on young individuals. This can be linked directly to many common health issues these days including obesity, diabetes, and cardiovascular diseases. Another downside of the sedentary lifestyle is that it places children at greater risk of posture deterioration. If children spend many hours playing games in the same posture, it would steadily destroy their spines' structures, which leads to difficulties in their later work and life. Finally, excessive exposure to telecommunication devices is one of the main culprits of anti-social behaviors among children. This stems from the fact that children, who spend a long time using smartphones or computers, may lose the ability to get involved in face-to-face interactions, which would mitigate their social life.
In sum, I concur with the view that the disadvantages of technological advances would outweigh the advantages when it comes to children's leisure activities. While young users of technology can have more options and enhanced experiences, their physical and psychological health would be jeopardized.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, thus, while, apart from, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74772036474 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20163389889 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623100303951 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4596844988 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.1875 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228295826696 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687412805157 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584610093858 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136371164756 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497535963459 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.07 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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