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There is a growing demand or fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. Discuss the possible cause for it. What measures can be taken by government and individuals to overcome this problem.

Essay topics: There is a growing demand or fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. Discuss the possible cause for it. What measures can be taken by government and individuals to overcome this problem.

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Nature has provided us various priceless things such as water, tress, food and so on. Presently, the quantity of drinking water is at low ebbfut to the human’s fault. Here, i would like to account for reasons behind this phenomenon with the relevant remedies.

There are manifold points to shore up the causes behind this scenario. First and foremost, excessive use of water by people. For example, masses use water in a big proportion without any sufficient need. Besides this, especially in india people do not have tendency to turn off the water tap due to the less awareness of saving water. As a result, volume of fresh water is declining at an alarming rate. In addition, factories throw the chemical water in rivers and send it again in land with the help of bore well. Hence, chemical water get mixed with drinkable water.

Futher emphasising on my point of view. Initially, deforestation is a major reason behind this happening. To demonstrate, people cut the trees for different purposes excessively. Apart from it, farmers use massive amount of water in lands to nurture their crops. Consequently, the problem of fresh water is rising day by day globally.

Multifarious solutions can be put down to overcome this gigantic problem. Firstly, government should impose hefty sum of fine on industries which mixed chemical water with fresh water. Moreover, it is prime duty of individuals to plant more and more trees in order to make healthy environment. Furthermore, farmers should preserve rainy water by digging in land so that they can use it any time as well as it it totally free of cost. Adding to it, government should increase the rate of water bills so that people become aware and turn off the tap whey water not in use.

To recapitulate, only water is a thing without it people can not survive more than four or five days. Undeniably, people should understand the significance of this precious thing. However, authorities should also take some steps to aware masses regarding this problem. Thus, joint steps of both can save water for next generations.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, well, apart from, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96857142857 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67203354494 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602857142857 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7517191983 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.4583333333 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5833333333 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70833333333 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282486890103 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777560993897 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539530184495 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158504309456 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452830295407 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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