These days everyone seems to have more possessions(e.g. computers, cars, mobile phones, etc) Our strong desire to own these things is making us less aware of important personal qualities such as kindness and concern for others. Do you agree or disagree
Nowadays, almost every person in this modern era have strong wishes to have more materials and they work hard to own materials, and some people have expensive stuff like laptops, vehicles, and watches etc.people desiring for these kinds of belonging, seems lack of some very important characters such as gentleness, goodwill and feeling for other who needs affections. I strongly agree with the statement that people who desire for this kind of possession have less knowledge of personal qualities .there are two main reasons for it.
firstly, in this materialistic world peoples wish to have more gadgets different types. when they own, these kinds of gadgets, make them selfish and emotionless the emotion of goodness to other peoples, the one who is in need. however, nowadays mostly wealthy peoples are drowned in the trend of brands, they have very string craze to have a popular brand and after owning it the feeling of uniqueness start eating them like an insect-eating wood, same they are hollow inside of ethics. in addition, they are now in the race of brands, which ultimately turns to less moral values and sympathetic feeling for other.for instance, according to survey in the west, group of teenagers are found that they only wish to become a friend of those, who possess branded cell phone , car smart watches etc.they seems less educated in and see the needy people with bad eye instead of helping them or to be kind to them.this trend have a dramatic increase in west culture.
after that, people advance in technology race but backward in morality. they did not work on developing personal characterization, which can make them graceful, and respectful in society. despite the fact, technology upgrades day to day and the possession they have yet become older but the developed character can upgrade them in social life. for example, another study has done among the characteristics of modern people in terms who possess materials like cars, mobile phones etc and the one who can't have branded phones cars etc, found more decent in characteristics such as kindness and wellwisher of other people.
in conclusion, good moral values are that when you feel sympathy for others. nowadays people who have possessions like an updated version of cars and cell phones etc, have less knowledge regarding kindness and emotions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07272727273 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6301614912 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555844155844 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.118344422 49.4020404114 243% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.75 106.682146367 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0833333333 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273408538979 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105608007389 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694981548328 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185696635178 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665340318529 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.78957915832 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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