These days more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent decades, our world have been industrialize significantly, brings about the appearance of more urban areas. Therefore, most people tend to leaving their hometown and migrate to those cities intending to have a better living quality. This esay will indicate why this situation causes more downsides than upsides.

There are some of positive points for moving away their home town. First of all, living in a city would offer people more opportunities to developed themselves, from major education to social skill, which leads to higher income. Moreover, accomodations and infrastructures in the urban are more mordern and convenient than in the countryside.

Nevertheless, many disadvantages of migrating could be listed in order to warn people. Because of the overload population in cities, there seems to be few available jobs left. This gives a rise to an enormous number of young people struggling in finding a career, although they have a qualitified certificate. For example, a research from a university in VietNam shows that nearly 40% of graduated students still don't have jobs. On the other hand, for those rural areas, they have many un-attended positions, such as doctors and teachers.

Additionally, the environment might also be harmed by too many people moving to cities. cities are already having issues related to traffic congestion and variety of pollutions, playing the major part in climate change and green house emission. For that reason, the more people migrate from rural to urban area, the worse the situation is. One relevant statistic is that the Hanoi, the capital of Vietnam, has been litered more than 5000 tons of trash compared to 5 years ago.

All in all, despite some benefits of migration, those disadvantages including the job-opportunity and the climate change, completely outweigh the advantages.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'industrialized'.
Suggestion: industrialized
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...a qualitified certificate. For example, a research from a university in VietNam shows that...
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Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... nearly 40% of graduated students still dont have jobs. On the other hand, for those...
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Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cities
...ed by too many people moving to cities. cities are already having issues related to tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, for example, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35616438356 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9158701519 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63698630137 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5063041273 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.75 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207429598315 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060712219231 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426455838958 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104610525035 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356066395771 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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