Nowadays, a greater number of children play computer games rather than going out and exercise. In my opinion, this is a negative development which can lead to health problems and addiction.
One serious problem that can arise from playing too many video games is that their health will be deteriorating. They will become obese and, in some cases, high blood pressure. The radiation from the screen monitor. If are exposed for a long time, it could cause harmful effects to our eyes like nearsightedness or even worse total blindness. If they wanted to be healthier, they should be spending more time outside the computer screen, doing hobbies like playing guitar or gardening.
Another problem is that they become more addicted to these games are because the developers usually give out virtual rewards for carrying out objectives to make the players feel like they have achieved something or even used the money in the real world to buy in-game currencies to make quick progression. Some of the games are created with attractive and colorful textures to target the children's audiences. The addiction will make them lack focus in their study, results in their bad academic results which are of much importance to their future. What could be done is that the parents should set up a timetable to limit their playing time so they would put themselves into more creative activities.
To sum up, the development that these children become too attached to video games is clearly considered to be negative as it makes them more sluggish and inactive.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Some
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Suggestion:
...makes them more sluggish and inactive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, in my opinion, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04651162791 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57887998127 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604651162791 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9120489423 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211197502616 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740528372155 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519062823765 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136810321174 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287270530811 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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