A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to

It is obvoius that education is one of the most imporatant parts of humans’ life. teachers play a crucial role in education and training of children espeacilay teenagers. in order to improve scientific level of students governments should spend time and money to increase knowledge of teachers and to improve their teaching, and it is worth doing it. a city can use different approches for achieving its goal of improving teacher’s teaching. I strongly believe that it is better for cities to provide online materials for teachers to study individually. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think if cities gives an identical opportunity to high school teachers in order to improve their teaching, they will able to meet their objective faster. In other words, if cities wants to select a group of outstanding teachers fr additional training and then these teachers provide this training for others teachers, it will take a lot more time than train all teachers through online materials. For example, when I was a student at high shool, the officilas planned to educate students in computer skills. Thus, they decided to improve the teachers’ skills in this field. They selected only distinguished teachers to train in summer and then they conveyed their information to other teachers in fall, while they intended to teach students computer skills in fall. Therefore, if they provide equal chance for all teachers in summer, they will able to train students in fall and save their time.
Moreover, using online material not only helps cities to reach its aims faster but also gives the same opportunity to all teachers in order to improve their teaching efficinecy. It is possible that excellent teachers miss some important points when they are tranferring the information to other teachers. As a result, using this method may not have suffuicient efficency. It is useful for teachers to have access to the same facilities.
To sum up, in my point of view, using online materail reasults in more profociency of teachers because the fact that all teachers can utilize the same chance and facilities. In addition, it helps cities satisfy their goals faster.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...elps cities satisfy their goals faster.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, in other words, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13774104683 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7897591629 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509641873278 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4446844247 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.611111111 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369613397926 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121552140036 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739203224332 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217827691295 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773083706919 0.056905535591 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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