Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important.
Discuss both side and give your opinion?
A number of people consider that graduating the university leads the youth to be more professional in their future career, however, another group of people believe that experience and proficiency are rather than education. I partially concur with the positive impact of education on the one's career like learning how devises a plan and defines the needs in order to fulfil them systematically.
On one hand, it is claimed that education would be useful for improving the efficiency at work. As a matter of fact, students learn about the experts' experience in the universities and they would understand the causes of the failures and avoid repeating the mistakes. Besides, another advantage of education is creating a type of preparation for the future job. That means students know about the critical points of their favorite job, the difficulties and the ways to surmount the problem implicitly and then when they commence their job the already have knowledge. A drawback of education is that it would be the waste of time if it was not related to the future job.
On the other hand, a group of people assume that skill and experience make people more efficient at work. It means it is urgent to have the proficiency to improve at work and get promotions rather than education and satisfactory grades. Obviously, skillful people have a key role in an organization and others would resolve the problems with the least harmful impacts due to the fact that they know many details and attend the little facts rather than beginners. Cons would be discussed is when beginners would be professional if the pleasant careers belonged to experts. It means it would be a waste of time to work instead of study in a circumstance that the person never updates the knowledge and know about the new technology invented.
In my point of view, which I stood before, education would be beneficial if it was related to the future job's field; however, hard working and fast learning would assist to get a promotion at work.
In conclusion, a number of people think education is effective for finding a good job and others believe proficiency is rather urgent than study. In my opinion, both of them are important, but the education would help to be more effective in the future and reduce the mistakes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 147, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'in conclusion', 'as a matter of fact', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.245823389021 0.247107183377 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.164677804296 0.155533422707 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0715990453461 0.0946595960268 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0405727923628 0.0501214627716 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0477326968974 0.0437548338989 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136038186158 0.122226691241 111% => OK
Participles: 0.0286396181384 0.0403226058552 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7353272298 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0286396181384 0.0326793684256 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119331742243 0.0861772015684 138% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0238663484487 0.021408717616 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00954653937947 0.011925033212 80% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2293.0 1933.35771543 119% => OK
No of words: 389.0 316.048096192 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89460154242 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20517956788 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.347043701799 0.374742101984 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.251928020566 0.28420135186 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.18766066838 0.203846283523 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131105398458 0.137316102897 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7353272298 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.037074148 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473007712082 0.56093040696 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.4279859238 60.7387585426 83% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.9333333333 20.7743622355 125% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.814977655 49.517814964 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.866666667 127.492653851 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.7743622355 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.814263465372 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 51.1261353899 49.1944974215 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.62264150943 1.69124875643 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399831431084 0.332605444948 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116666931425 0.102741220458 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0392984275787 0.0668466124924 59% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.646646352459 0.534860350844 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148655215585 0.148594505496 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197011605768 0.134430193775 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421195243871 0.0742795772207 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.420602436221 0.324371583561 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.140174235942 0.0638462369009 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274000326486 0.228012699653 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682817271273 0.058150111329 117% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.