IELTS Essay
Topic - Nowadays, more and more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?
Kindly Evaluate and help me in understanding IELTS estimated band score for my writing.
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An increased number of people are preferring to meet their friends and family online instead of in person. In my opinion, this is creating a detrimental effect on individual reading them to seclusion, and serious health and social issues.
Firstly, social media creates a hallucinogenic virtual world, which harbingers isolation and self-centeredness. Before the rise of social networking, people used to meet others face to face which brought them joy, and feeling of belonging and wanted. But now, with no real human interaction people are leading themselves to a fake life which is showcased online as a perfect life, consequently making them envy of others and often leading to depression.
Secondly, socialising online has resulted into serious health issues that is caused mainly due to sedentary lifestyle that follows. For instance, people choose to stay at home and chat online, confining themselves into rooms instead of indulging with people outside for a sport or a walk, which results into little or no exercise. For this reason, there is an increse in health issues such as obesity and cardiac problems.
Finally, choosing to socialize online is the reason for increased cyber crime rate. Admittedly, people ofter register themselves under fake identities to lure people, especially teenagers who are naive and immature, into sexual or monitoring favours. Additionally, if someone shares some personal photos or information online, it is present there for everyone's access for lifetime and can be missused anytime which can lead to embarrasment.
To conclude, socialising online has various drawbacks which has damaging effects on one's physical and psychological health, also at harbingers increasing social crimes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ing. An increased number of people are preferring to meet their friends and family online...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
... social networking, people used to meet others face to face which brought them joy, an...
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Line 9, column 246, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...emselves into rooms instead of indulging with people outside for a sport or a wal...
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Line 11, column 21, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ardiac problems. Finally, choosing to socialize online is the reason for incre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54609929078 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92583922736 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631205673759 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1006131075 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.307692308 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240190543465 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901610942805 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115448356502 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146397744638 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146342701027 0.056905535591 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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