In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

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In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

Many people believe that children should be doing various type of paid work. However, the issue is not entirely straightforward and arguments can also be made against the idea. This essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view.

On the one hand, proponents who support the idea of paid work for children's cite various benefits it can bring to a child. Firstly, It helps especially the young children's to utilize their time efficiently and effectively while doing their homework or finishing multiple projects at same time. For example, young children who go for a part time job either at McDonalds or KFC displays a high level of time-management skills in managing various tasks during the day.
Secondly, It bridges the gap between the theory and practical knowledge while exposing them to the ground realities in the workforce. Furthermore, these significant experiences helps in shaping the career of their life in both academic and work environment.

Conversely, Opponents of this view point out that by putting children to work at an early age can have detrimental effect on the pupil's education and self ability to take own decisions. Firstly, Children can become a victim of being bullied or truant at work while working for a longer period of time on a daily basis. Secondly, due to long working hours accompanied with other factors, it can result in stress, low-self esteem and aggressive behavior. Thirdly, Children's are able to devote less time to themselves because of being occupied throughout their day which can lead to bad scores in their exams.

Overall, It's a fair idea to let the children's do the paid jobs while making sure that operations are carried out in well-behaved and controlled environment.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...or example, young children who go for a part time job either at McDonalds or KFC displays...
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Line 6, column 130, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pupils'' or 'pupil's'?
Suggestion: pupils'; pupil's
... age can have detrimental effect on the pupils education and self ability to take own ...
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Line 6, column 287, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...uant at work while working for a longer period of time on a daily basis. Secondly, due to long...
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Line 8, column 10, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... bad scores in their exams. Overall, Its a fair idea to let the childrens do the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09440559441 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7913509593 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625874125874 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0384404289 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.076923077 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200060199032 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750411369759 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584595475069 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104196925335 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376451384607 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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