One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
With the advances in technology and the utilization of modern facilities the medical care has advanced incrementing the life span of the people. Albeit, they apportion with the community their erudition and life experiences which in turn leads to development, they put a pressure on the family and economy of the society. In my opinion, with the enhancement in healthcare facilities more benefits are provided to the world which will be discussed further in this essay
People will live perpetuated and salubrious lives with refinement in the medical amenities as it will provide remedy for proximate all the world's ailments. In fact, the society will have older people who have more erudition and exposure which they can gift to humanity. For example, many edifiers, researchers, writers and scientist can impart their life experiences, expertise and erudition with younger generation. Furthermore, these are an asset to the companies as they are enriched with erudition, skills and experiences which will avail in the magnification and expansion of the organisation
On the contrary, owing to the advanced medical technology, there are some drawbacks connected with the incrementation in human life expectancy. Firstly, the old generation are an encumbrance on the society as they are more prone to health care treatments and diseases. This will put a pressure on the regime as they will have to spend more mazuma on medical equipment’s, medicine and health care rehabilitation. For example, countries like Japan have a financial burden to rejuvenate and remedy the diseases of the society's elderly people. In fact, more medicos and nurses will be employed which designates more mazuma will be disposed off as they salaries. Secondly, the senior denizens put a constraint on the family as they will have to spend more time on taking care of their physical conditions and taking them to the medicos for conventional check ups along with doing job. Dur to which they will not have anytime for their own or their children.
To conclude, older generations are not an encumbrance on the country’s financial economy and their family instead, they are contributing actively in the community by enlightening us with their construal, expertness and perennial achievements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in fact, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34722222222 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05847209293 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483333333333 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.7337681017 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.076923077 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6923076923 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.083616332553 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036642085439 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256494718271 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519917310974 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306809007037 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 9.78957915832 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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