One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
With the advances in technology and the utilization of modern facilities the medical care has forged ahead ameliorating the life span of the people. Albeit, the elders will apportion with the community their cognizance and life experiences which in turn leads to development, they put a pressure on the family and financial system of the society. In my opinion, with the enhancement in healthcare facilities more benefits are provided to the world which will be discussed further in this essay
People will live perpetuated, salubrious and energetic lives with refinement in the medical amenities as it will distribute remedies for proximately all the world's ailments as well as they will actively participate in many sports like golf, chess and so on. In fact, the older and more experienced generation of the society will gift to the humanity their erudition. For example, there are many edifiers, researchers, writers and scientist who can impart their life experiences, expertise and cognizance with younger generations. Furthermore, they are an asset to the organisations who are enriched with erudition, skills and experiences which will avail in the magnification and expansion of the administrations.
On the contrary, owing to the advanced medicinal technology, there are some drawbacks connected with the incrementation in time of human esse. Firstly, the old generation are an encumbrance on the society as they are more prone to health care treatments and diseases. This will put a pressure on the regime as they will have to spend more mazuma on medical equipment’s, medicine and health care rehabilitation. For example, countries like Japan have a financial burden to rejuvenate and remedy the diseases of the society's elderly people. In fact, more medicos and nurses will be employed which designates more mazuma will be disposed of as their salaries. Secondly, the senior denizens put a constraint on the family as they will have to spend more time on taking care of their physical conditions and taking them to the medicos for conventional check-ups along with doing job. Dur to which they will not have any time for their own or their children.
To conclude, the advantages of the amended medical facilities outweighs the disadvantages. Even if, the older generation put a financial constraint on the nation, but still they avail in the development of the society by sharing its valuable cognizance and expertise.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, as for, for example, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28020565553 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08253770657 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485861182519 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 664.2 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.1138328792 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.933333333 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0897918784888 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369751652493 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350237483772 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06075472574 0.151304729494 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00231947723168 0.056905535591 4% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 9.78957915832 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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