The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I'm off the opinion that every individuals birth with their own special talent but can we result that they can’t participate in other activities?
It seems to me that, obviously, not only can we follow and work and our Talents but we should try other activities as well .From scientists point of view individuals who is strive and practice more will perform better in their sports and achieve their goals way sooner.
It is not important that you are an artist or a politician or even a disabled person it is worth bearing in mind that, we could become a real sport person, were we aware of our perseverance power.
There are lots of evidence that having natural ability is crucial but hard work and practice can promote your ability and courage to perform and practice much better.
Because you can gather much experiences and skills and you put yourself under tremendous pressure, undoubtedly you can perform even better.
As the old saying goes, practice makes perfect. to put it simply the more you work hard the more power and self-confidence you will have.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 13.0 41.998997996 31% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 890.0 1615.20841683 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 184.0 315.596192385 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83695652174 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56058443087 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 176.041082164 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619565217391 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 274.5 506.74238477 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5613113097 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.142857143 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85714285714 7.06120827912 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.080078825075 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383077312366 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353805437187 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0433037571107 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340471320103 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 78.4519038076 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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