Some people argue that technological inventions such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive Do you agree or disagree

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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive.

Do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by rajeshd28 on Thu, 04/19/2018 - 03:57

Technological inventions are a boon to the masses in many different ways. Say for example, mobile phones , they help people far away to communicate in a hassle free manner. But they do certainly have some disadvantages as well , say when it comes to social interaction , people find it hard to be interactive these days physically and I do agree that they have damaging effects on relationships.

Firstly, psychological imbalance is created due to over use of mobile phones. People who are exposed to way too much of mobile phones suffer from many psychological problems starting from insomnia to depression. Kids especially these days are spending their leisure time in cell phones are deprived of any physical activity. The results are often expression of anger, crying, constant sense of fear etc,.. Studies from many universities state that increased use of cell phones can affect ones behavior drastically.

Secondly, physical problems experienced in ones body.People who spend time to walk or jog as part of their daily routine have started to use cell phones these days. They either hear music or play digital games while exercising.This constantly keep their minds busy. They miss to concentrate on walking or jogging instead operate their phones. They miss to take large deep breaths of fresh air and enjoy the surroundings of a beautiful morning or evening.People get hurt sometimes badly while they walk operating a mobile phone.There are numerous videos on the internet of people falling into man holes or getting hit by a pole. Although they are funny to watch , its a serious growing problem.

To conclude, cell phones are necessary devices but only for communication and social media , but there should be a limit to its usage. One should make sure their personal relationship is interactive and sound and cellphones are not damaging it.

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Average: 7.7 (13 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16943521595 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91119064491 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627906976744 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5100181355 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.733333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16694474148 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495057490221 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476633460704 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988123019972 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579696296063 0.056905535591 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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