Some people believe that the government should ban dangerous sporting activities while others think that people have the freedom do whatever sports they choose.

Essay topics:

Some people believe that the government should ban dangerous sporting activities while others think that people have the freedom do whatever sports they choose.

Activities, as it is said, keep a person young and energetic. It is in tune with it that a person must always keep oneself occupied with an activity of any sort. Sporting activity is one of many activities which pay no heed to the age barrier.
As a matter of fact, sporting activities contribute a lot towards the physical fitness, mental ability / balance and overall characteristic of an individual. However, a ‘dangerous’ sporting activity must be undertaken by an individual with an extra caution. Though a dangerous sporting activity is generally performed due to a sudden rush of adrenalin but the consequences of such an activity are not reasonably positively skewed. The probability of an untoward incident, while performing a dangerous sporting activity, is always high.
It is due to this reason that State interference, to a reasonable extent, is welcome. The activities which are more skewed towards the possibility of a fatal accident must be regulated and consequently banned by the government.
However, there is another school of thought which is on the view that individuals must be accorded the freedom to choose the sport according to their wishes. The ideology of the followers of this school of thought is that the individual is matured enough to understand what is more beneficial to him. However, they fail to look beyond the veil, probably reason due to which an individual undertakes the performance of such dangerous acts. The reasons may vary from peer pressure, family circumstances, financial needs or just momentary pleasure. Whatever may be the reason, an individual must not be given the liberty to put his life, and consequently the life of his dependents, at risk. The fortnightly sports magazine, The Risktakers, did share the views of the son of the famous skydiver, Peterson, who met with an accident while trying to attempt skiing after getting himself released from the parachute at a height of only 15 feet above the ground level.
Yet another interview with the daughter of another renowned sports person, Robinson, revealed the sad story wherein after the death of his paratrooper father, it became difficult for her to make her both ends meet during her teenage. The only reason for the death of her father was that he wanted to set a record of jumping from an unbelievable height.
In the end, I am of the opinion that there should be the complete ban on the dangerous sporting activities as it is the survivors of the deceased who has to pay a heavy price for the acts of their mentors.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...aracteristic of an individual. However, a 'dangerous' sporting activity...
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Line 5, column 61, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...w with the daughter of another renowned sports person, Robinson, revealed the sad stor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, may, so, while, as to, as a matter of fact, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98356807512 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97792465569 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532863849765 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.0 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6940856896 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.944444444 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178785029169 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610107145244 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543712038587 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981132326592 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058108885096 0.056905535591 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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