Some people believe that playing a musical instrument can be beneficial in many different ways. Others think it is a waste of time to play a musical instrument. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the world. People have different views on the issue of whether playing a musical instrument would be beneficial for individuals or not. I believe that music plays an important role in people's lives and it has positive impacts on their personality and daily life.
There are various reasons why I would argue that playing a musical instrument have positive effects on people. Firstly, music represent the history of each society and it shows the traditions and customs of different ethnic groups in various nations. Secondly, music brings a nice relaxation to people's daily life since it helps them to soothe their mind and concentrate better on whatever they do. Finally, it help fellows to be more innovative and boost their imagination and productivity. To support my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, indicates that the high school students in USA who were playing a musical instrument were calmer and more creative in their educational career. I believe that the positive impacts of playing a musical instrument should not be neglected since it arouses emotions and touches the hearts easily. Moreover, it is one branch of science and many researches admit the potent effect of it on human being during the past decades.
On the other hand, a group of people have strong attitudes against playing a musical instrument. They believe that it is a waste of time and individuals can be more productive if they allocate their time to do more important things such as developing their work skills or doing exercise. Furthermore, it is believed that music is a pastime and people should play it in their leisure time. Moreover, it would be more useful for children and pupils to concentrate on the academic courses instead of learning music since the schools' curriculum is already full and by eliminating this subject from time table
they will have time for better choices such as learning a new language. A salient example of this is England that remove the music from high schools and it had a great impact on children's prosperity in academic lessons.
In conclusion, music not only is a popular hobby for people but also brings relaxation for them. Without music, the history of a nation would be vanished and the next generation would be strange to their past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95488721805 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63075771886 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521303258145 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9433332894 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.294117647 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373010196417 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138326522606 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886433801618 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219092398936 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113650477609 0.056905535591 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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