Nothing could more valuable than the students' health. It's their weapon to absorb and comprehend great amount of informations. However, It's always been intensely argued wether physical exercise should be a required of every school day. Some people may hold the opinion that the physical exercise should be an optional part not an obligation one, other may have the negative attitude. If I were forced to choose one of the options, I would rather the physical exersice to be a required part of every school day for two main reasons.
First, workout will definitely add benfinits to their health. Hundreds of surveys have shown the positive addition the sporting would do if we kept it in our every day routine. For example, few years ago when I was in my freshman year in high school. I had always struggled with my weight. Some of the students would bully me and say negative things, and that not only made me feel devastated but also lowered my self steam. One day, the school had made an announcement that the physical exercise was no longer an optional part, It was going to be an obligatory part. At the beginning, I disagreed with that weird announcement, I thought it would add more pressure to us. When I started my first sport's class, I would never in a million-year though I would corporate, But, I was unusually enthusiastically playing with the coach. As the days progressed, I started to fall in love with specific one exercise which was" cross-fit". I became so passionate about it, Some of my family members were amazed about the ultimate change that had become part of my every day life. Even my schoolmates, started noticing me losing tremendous amount of weight. No words can express how I felt after hearing all those positive comments about my body shape. If the school had not required us to do sports I would have never thought about doing it by self. That story taught me a lot about the importance of working out not only for the students but for every one else.
Second, exercising and physical activities are imperative demands to help the students too fell more relaxed and happier. After a long day of studying unfavorable academic topics, would not you deserve some stress release and relaxation. For instance, a few days ago, when I was running through the daily science journal, there was one article that caught my attention. It was talking about, what will happen to our brains if we started doing some sport's activities. The article said that, jogging for thirty-minute three times a week will impact our health in a good way. For example, It will lead to the release of endorphin which is the hormone of happiness and that will reduce your depression, lower your stress level as well as improve your night-sleep. As you can see, working out could be more beneficiary.
In sum, though some students may disagree with my attitude, other may not. In fact, I could not stress how significant the sport is. Not only it's good for your health but also It plays a major rule in your weight loss journey. Every school should require Its students to work out at least three days a week.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
Nothing could more valuable than the students health. Its their weapon to absorb and ...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...more valuable than the students health. Its their weapon to absorb and comprehend g...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'been'.
Suggestion: been always
...at amount of informations. However, Its always been intensely argued wether physical exerci...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... I had always struggled with my weight. Some of the students would bully me and say negativ...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... positive comments about my body shape. If the school had not required us to do sp...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, at least, for example, for instance, in fact, talking about, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 545.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73027522936 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60347252455 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499082568807 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7998882501 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9333333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36666666667 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283583710687 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717386435529 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760108461494 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192294323403 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855914512598 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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