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Agree or disagree? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's success in school.

This topic leads me to think of my classmates who has affected my thoughts a lot, when I was still an undergraduate. This raises the question of whether classmates are a more imperative influence than parents on a child's success in school. My view is that classmates actually have an essential influence than parents on my success in school.

First of all, classmates’ ideas are closer to our thoughts than parents’. For example, I study in mechanical engineering, and I often concern about whether I can have a bright future in my career and have many questions about my major. In the meantime, I usually express my thought to my classmate and ask help from them. Fortunately, Because we are the same age, there is no much difference between our ideas, and they can always offer me some perfect solutions to my questions and lead me to the right way. In contrast, parents may not solve my issues because we are not the same generation. Thus, my parents can’t really understand my feelings, and I can’t also transfer my concerns to them .

Second, classmates are more intelligent than parents. For instance, I study in National Cheng Kung University, and most of my classmates have exceptional ability to resolve the problems which occur in our classes or experiments. As a result, when I face some difficulty, I can normally hold my questions to consult them directly, and they can also deal with my issues immediately. However, because there are a lot of challenging subjects in my major, I may not usually anticipate that my parent can solve my problems, like calculus or physics.

To conclude, these are the two reasons why I hold the belief that classmates are a more imperative influence than parents on a child's success in school. In addition, I would say that classmates not only make us more successful in school, but also influence our morality in our life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...was still an undergraduate. This raises the question of whether classmates are a more imperative influe...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
..., Because we are the same age, there is no much difference between our ideas, and ...
^^
Line 3, column 694, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... can’t also transfer my concerns to them . Second, classmates are more intellig...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86335403727 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87937014991 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518633540373 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3177359572 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262097261268 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141196542611 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16122286404 0.0737576698707 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239535679924 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164082292429 0.0645574589148 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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