Agree or disagree? It is better for the younger people to take risk and explore new things than the older people.
There is no shortage of debate bout whether young people should take risk and explore new things or not. Although many believe it is better for older individuals to take risk and try to explore new things, I, on the other hand, believe it is crucial for youngster to explore new things and take risk. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this way in the following.
To begin with, people can be more successful when they have knowledge and experience. Taking risk and exploring new things gives young people opportunity to gain some experience and broaden their knowledge. Not only that, but also they have time to correct their mistakes, because they have a lot of time, but older people do not have enough time to tolerate failure or fix their mistakes. According to new survey, about 75 percentages of university students like to fund their own business, and according to on other survey 89 percentages of new businesses faild in their first year. However, this could discourage people to take risk, but we all know many of current successful business man and entrepreneue toke risk and tried different things. Therefore, taking risk helped them to became experienced, and used that knowledge to become successful. For instance, when I was a university student, I fund my own computer company. At the beginning I worked as a programmer, and created windows application. After a year I could not earn a lot of money, hence I forced to close my business. Then, I be hired in anti virus company. In that company I learned that they do not produce mobile phone anti virus, needless to say android cell phone is vulnerable. Consequently, after a six month I decided to fund mobile phone anti virus. My firms became success, in order to I was the first person who made only android anti virus in Iran. After I graduated from university I continued to develop my company and I put my previous experience in to account, and currently my computer company is one of the top ten companies in the word.
Moreover, when young people take risk, often because they have less money and less commitment than old people, their failure has less effect on their lives. Because, many of them is single and their failure has less effect in their whole life. For instance. My grandfurther invested his whole retirements money to fund his restaurant. Unfortunately, he faild in his business and because of that my grandmother had to worked as a cashier and my father had worked in a car sell company when he was 12. In contrast, I used to saved some money and I invested my money to my friend company. Unfortunately, he faild his business as well as m groundfather, but because I did not have family or other commitment the result of my failure was not similar to my grandfather.
In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe that it is better for younger individuals to take risk and explere new things. This is because it helps them to gain experience and they have enough time to fix their mistakes, and because their failure is smaller than older people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2555.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74025974026 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72320320364 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448979591837 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 815.4 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.603993922 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.56 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.32 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271951229578 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761730269913 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111853376898 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223775082744 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136412781645 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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