Agree or disagree: the rapid growth of the cities has mostly positive impacts on society.
There are a great number of big-scale cities in modern society. This will raise the question of whether the rapid growth of the cities has mostly positive impacts on society. In my opinion, I will disagree with that statement.
First of all, the rapid growth of the cities will cause lots of different types of pollution. Hsinchu city will be a suitable example. Decades ago, this city was just an undeveloped and destitute area but there weren’t environmental issues here. In the 1970s, the Taiwanese government decided to invent an extremely huge amount of funds to introduce high-tech industry in Hsinchu city. With this announcement, a good deal of corporations thrived, such as TSMC and Media Tek, which were top-notch businesses in the world. However, these types of enterprises would consume much electricity and manufacture a variety of pollution, like air pollution or water pollution. Therefore, with the rapidly-growing economy, the local government also had to cope with these environmental issues. Fortunately, the government proposed a series of environmentally protective policies greatly cooperating with these big companies to solve these tough problems. In contrast, if the cities don’t grow at a fast rate, these troubles will not be produced.
Second, the rapid growth of the cities will pose the quickly-rising crime rate. Taichung city will be a compelling instance. Decades ago, Taichung city was just a rural area, and the crime rate was really low there. However, in the 1980s, uncounted industries were established in this city, like banking, which would also bring in much capital. With these funds, Taichung cities could develop diverse forms of industries, such as restaurants or hotels. However, because there would be countless benefits involved in these fields, such as property or wealth, there would also produce lots of contention. It would make the crime rate rise more rapidly than before. Therefore, the local government chose to formulate some regulations to fight crime, like “criminal organization prevention law”, which obtained an extraordinary effect. By contrast, if the cities develop at a slow rate, it wouldn’t cause these extremely severe issues.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I disagree with the statement. On one hand, the rapid growth of the cities may cause many different types of pollution. On the other hand, the rapid growth of the cities would also contribute to the quickly-rising crime rate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ties in modern society. This will raise the question of whether the rapid growth of the cities has most...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...he rapid growth of the cities may cause many different types of pollution. On the other hand, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32315521628 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89709379071 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52417302799 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9101647247 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227405762905 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761084394991 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916508285089 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191776988421 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995407422617 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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