Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Companies should pay for employees to get a university degree.
By and large, companies have perennially been striving to apply the best methods to increase their efficiency. In this regard, having employees who have a solid academic background could be an effective way. The ever-increasing importance of education among employees has aroused a longstanding controversy as to whether companies should pay for employees to get a university degree or not. From my vantage point, companies have some more effective ways to spend their money, and they should not pay for employees to get a university degree. In what follows, I will vindicate two reasons to elaborate my standpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that education is a time-consuming process for employees. Therefore, they can't work as a full-time employee. It is crystal clear that less time work has a negative impact on companies' efficiency. Moreover, today, all information that is crucial for employees to do their duties is accessible on the internet. Thus, the drawbacks of such financial supports outweigh the benefits. By way of illustration, five years ago, my brother decided to allocate a part of his company's income to his employees to educate in university. Consequently, his employees came late and left the company sooner than work time to attend their universities' classes. Some of them brought their book and read them in the company. Not only did lack of discipline make my brother angry but also his income dramatically reduced. As a result, he changed his mind and decided to stop his financial support and asked employees to abandon their education. If he had not paid to his employees to get a university degree, his company's income would not have decreased.
Furthermore, there are some more effective manners that companies could apply to gain their efficiency. Moreover, some of those manners are more cost-effective. For example, companies could hire an expert for a short time to improve the knowledge of employees and make them up-to-date. By doing so, employees do not waste their time in university to learn surplus information that is not practical in their work. Also, companies pay less money for hiring an expert in comparison with paying for employees to get a university degree. As a case in point, last year, I proposed my boss to hire a professional accountant to teach some new and efficient methods to our employees who had not academic degree and worked in our accounting section. He accepted and hired someone who taught our employees only in three sessions. As a result, the efficiency of our accounting part incredibly increased. Our boss should have spent more money if he had paid for employees to get a university degree instead of applying the way that I proposed.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that companies should not pay for employees to get a university degree. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: First, this way is time-consuming and reduces the employees' time work. Second, hiring an expert to teach employees who don't have an academic degree is more efficient and cost-effective.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... has aroused a longstanding controversy as to whether companies should pay for employees to g...
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Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... process for employees. Therefore, they cant work as a full-time employee. It is cry...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
...less time work has a negative impact on companies efficiency. Moreover, today, all inform...
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Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to surplus'
Suggestion: to surplus
...waste their time in university to learn surplus information that is not practical in th...
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Line 7, column 307, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...hiring an expert to teach employees who dont have an academic degree is more efficie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2609.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10567514677 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01102633956 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457925636008 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 816.3 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3178714083 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1785714286 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319711651817 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975160971592 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116334337488 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23329281047 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495162704674 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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