Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that governments are constantly seeking ways to enhance the quality of life in their countries. However, to achieve this, they face various challenges, especially regarding budget allocation; for example, it is questionable whether they should expend more funds on athletics events or arts. As far as I am concerned, funding sports events is more beneficial than the arts. In what follows, the reasons supporting my viewpoint will be elaborated.
The first and foremost reason is that significant collective health benefits are indirectly obtained by holding sports events. The reason is that watching sports events motivates citizens to participate in sports activities. In other words, it acts as a motivator for people, leading to physical and mental health for the public. It is apparent that it is the governments' responsibility to improve their citizen's well-being; therefore, providing the Olympic games for example with money can bring about constructive consequences for societies. Take my brother's experience in this regard. Ten years ago, having seen football games and popular teams’ performance, he inspired to register in a football club. He has diligently been tried since then, and now he is one of the great football players in my hometown. My brother is one example of many individuals who have been stimulated to become an athlete thanks to special attention to the sport by the government.
Furthermore, since athletics events are a great source of delight to the majority of people, it can bring happiness for a wide range of people. Not only do a considerable number of individuals follow athletics games, but also watching them constitutes a significant part of their life. As you can see, football teams all around the globe have a great number of fans, supporting them all the time. On the other hand, the most important art events are held in the world while a huge number of people even do not become aware of that. The media coverage confirms my point. Athletics news is covered daily in the news, whereas hardly can we see anything about arts events. This demonstrates that governments should put more money to support athletics events compared to the arts.
In conclusion, I am of the firm belief that governments should put athletics their top priority when devoting budget. This is mainly because not only do sports events motivate citizens to get involved in sports activities and in this way, they can maintain better health, but also these events are substantially popular among people and bring joy to the community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...e public. It is apparent that it is the governments responsibility to improve their citizen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15990453461 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85270061286 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54892601432 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1182570395 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.952380952 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18425601828 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530526748527 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576431651627 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108984211604 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529067239267 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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