Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Athletics have gained a certain amount of attention after the advent of olympic games. even though there are different fields of studies the students admission to highly reputed universities are based on their athletic excellence. Most often art field is ignored.I believe that is more important to fund sports and games than arts due to the following reasons.
Firstly, it is easier to pursue one’s dream with good skills in playing a sport. Nowadays the universities look into the applicants extracurricular skills in addition to their academic excellence.For instance, a student who plays sport like basketball and has won many matches are more likely to get a spot in their dream university. The student would get scholarships even to learn in that university if belonging to a poor financial background. hence, it is easier with a sport skill to go higher in your career.
Secondly, olympic medal winning is a breathtaking moment for anyone and for the nation too. Likewise, the recognition for the victorians are very valuable. For example, a candidate who wins an olympic medal is a nation's pride too. He will get enough money for his life which can make his life secure. Moreover, there will be plenty of opportunities for him to grow in his career as well. Therefore the state and government funding for the game activities are better than arts.
Additionally, the physically challenged category too is benefited equally if more funding is allocated to sports and games. The paralympic olympic games are the newly stated games which provide enough opportunity for these people to start dreaming higher in spite of their disabilities. Earlier the handicapped ones were not recognised in the field of sports but now they are encouraged to participate in the games and are given enough training to grow. hence, more budget needs to be allocated to sports than arts.
To conclude, the advantages for supporting state sponsored fund for the sports sector is more and is beneficial to the public. Since, it provides more opportunities for the students as well as the disabled ones with talent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, likewise, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12427745665 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85315014834 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560693641618 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9340126486 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3157894737 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2105263158 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128127405532 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419864375946 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407337389679 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078879887739 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415278984429 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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