Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The governments generally have limited fundings and yet a lot of issues to deal with. So, to be effective, they should prioritize the issues which are most vital for them and for the residents of their country. Some think that the government should invest more money in arts, and some other belive that funding Olympic teams should be in priority. I also agree with the second group due to a number of reasons which I am going to discuss.
First, Olympic is the most important sporting event in the world, with thousands of participants from all countries and billions of viewers from all over the world. Good performance of the athletes in these games would attract the attention of people to the country. Also, some international sponsors could be attracted so that they would start investing in the teams.These sponsors provide money and more money means having access to better facilities and better coaches which, can guarantee future success as well. Also, there is a chance that some of the athletes could be transferred into a well-known club and become an international star and an iconic representation of the country.
Secondly, the member of these successful teams could become role models for the people, especially the young generation, provide them an enthusiasm to start playing sports. This can lead the society to be healthier and happier, in a long run.
Thirdly, these sporting events can be a reason for people to gather together to watch the games together, whether in a park or a bar or in each others house. For example,for the tennis finals of the games, hunderds of people in my city gathered together to watch the match in the central park. This can bring people joy even if it is just for a few days.
All in all, I think that investing on Olympic teams would be a more effective investment for the governments since success in these popular games can attract attention, provide joy and healthiness to people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86144578313 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64339793072 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530120481928 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0231502628 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.285714286 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104316924049 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380096982523 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382174721738 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0563243934115 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497355863999 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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