Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent’s job than to choose jobs that are different from their parent’s job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, A young person’s first real step into adulthood is finding a job. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among parents about the job that their offspring must select. Some parents believe that children should choose their desirable job without any limit. Others, however advocate the idea that juvenile have to continue their parent's job for some reasons. I personally, concur with the former. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
To begin with, young people should consider their innate talents and abilities to select their vocation and parents have not to push their offspring to follow the job they do not interested in. It is important for parents to give their children support and encouragement to explore the many options available to find the best career fit. For example, I can recall my sister when she wanted to choose her major in university. Although my father had much experience in civil engineering that could guarantee my sister future, he allow my sister independence in choosing her major and job. My sister prefer being doctor to civil engineer. Now she is very satisfied with his job.
Second, it is prone to parent's job becomes outdate and unfashionable in upcoming future. Therefore, it cannot guarantee offspring's future. In today's modern world, some jobs boon a lot and some of them become unpopular. If young people keep track of their parent's jobs that is not proper for current community, they run a big risk of defeat that it cannot compensate later. This clearly demonstrates that paying attention to the society's demands could be a pivotal factor in finding job, thereby being successful.
To sum up, parents serve as major influence in their children's career selection. They should consider their offspring's interests and search a lot for up-to-date jobs that could be a stepping-stone to prosperity of new generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'allows'.
Suggestion: allows
...at could guarantee my sister future, he allow my sister independence in choosing her ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, by and large, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13333333333 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74477446215 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568253968254 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.708934031 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1052631579 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5789473684 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404496560481 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123208241531 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079143247754 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254497874873 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699400218153 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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