Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern world, we have been surounded by new technologies and we have the opportunities to use them in order to live everywhere we wnat to be. So applicaple are these techonologies, that we could use them to move and live easily in several cities. The controversial question which arises here is that whether living in one city during all our lifes is better or move to new places? As far as, I am concerned, I disagree with the idea of being just in one place. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first reason I want to point out is that we can grow among several cultures. It would be an asset for every person that have lived in different cities, because he/she have had the specific challenges in facing of namerous issues that finally make him/her a experienced person. Hence, by haveing a lot experience he can use them in future in any aspects of life. Morever, by living in some towns it would be possible to lern new beahaviours of other people . Accordingly,in this case, we are making try and error to look at our manners through different lens, that finally, make us a better person. Take my experience as an example, I was born in a small city and grown there untill 18 years old. After that, I moved to Tehran, which is one the biggest cities in the world, in order to attending to university. During my education time, I made a lot of new friends with different bckgrounds so this changed my angel's view to the world that I was surounded by it.
The next reason comes in my mind is that not only do living a severl cities gives me experiences and chages my view, but also, it provides us to recognize and use the facilities that are being related to each cities. Accroding to former pargraph, when I moved to Tehran, I could use universities there that are the most famous universities our country, thus by moving I made new chances to use new facilities. In addition, some cities have not art musioms, concert halls or even cinemas, but we can change our cities to use such amazing places. Hence, such places are necessery to learn about our history and make fun. Had I have a responsibilty to order my father, I would have made him to travel to Isfahan, a place full of parks, musums, art exhibions and kind people.(1)
In conclusion, should you want to be in just one city in which you have been born and grown, in my openion it is a wrong idea because you are lossing tha chance of gaining new experinces, connecting with new people, improve your behavarious, using facilities such as universities, cinema, musiums and so on. All in all, by moving and living in different places we will transform to new person that is more succesful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, hence, if, look, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52254098361 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64621044746 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508196721311 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.578662702 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.157894737 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6842105263 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240418620102 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774643501139 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569685789312 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165757948088 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055831877141 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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