Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
In today's progressive world, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of work in our life. Some people believe that one of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a job. On the other extreme of the rope, others holds the opposite opinion. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I think that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, a part-time job will provide for teenagers a chance to develop functional and helpful skill that can prepare them for adult life. In other words, people who work can have valuable experiences and ideas to achieve their future goals. Take my experience as a example. When I was seventeen years old, I worked for a small company in my city. In that time, I did not have job experience. So, for me was a good period to adquire skills at work. As a result, after nine years, I was promoted. Hence, I earned some money and it was great to achieve my personal objetives in my adult life. If I had not had a part-time job, nor could I develop my expertise at work neither could I earn money. Therefore, it was excellent for my life.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that, having a job teenage children will relive their stress and worries. To be more specific, a work can open the people's horizons and also develop their self-confidence. For instance, an experimental research conducted by some master psychology professors shows that a people who had a job when were a teenager have less mental disease, such as depression. Moreover, this study argues that these people have more abilities to deal with their own feelings.
Take the above reasons into account, I firmly believe that a part-time job for teenage children not only open up a whole gamut of great experiences and skills, but also it provide for people a good lifestyle with less stress.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68421052632 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60226566447 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537396121884 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9548796415 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.55 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.05 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346935755515 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103049076822 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134720255778 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220017096767 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825098506647 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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