Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the greatest experiences of every person is traveling. People are more than willing to take a day off from their jobs and explore new places they have not visited yet. Though some people prefer to travel within their own countries, some people enojoy traveling to foreign countries. In my opinion, altough traveling to other countries can be fun and amazing, I prefer to travel inside the borders of my country, and I have two main reasons to further support my idea.
First of all, traveling inside our domain is safer and more straightforward. Communicating with peole from our own country with mutual nationalities and languages is easier than speaking to foreigners with different languages, cultures, or even currencies. Traveling in the same country a person lives in can assure him more safety, because he knows how to deal with people, how to choose where to stay or where to go, and eventually in desperate times, he is capable of calling for help from his friends or other people than can access him. For example, one of my friends went on a trip to Tabirz, which is one of the northern cities of our country, and even though he did not know the Azari language for communicating with people, he gave me a call and a I reached my self to him and helped him towards continuing his job. The example I mentioned cannot be assigned to foreign trips, due to the hardship one has to follow in order to travel to other countries.
Secondly, traveling inside our home county is usually more cheaper and economically frugal. The mutuality in currency advantages travelers with many factors such as not having to convert currency to the destination country's currency, not having to pay for required certificates for traveling, being familiar with the prices of commodity one has to buy, etc. For further explaination, if somebody tries to travel to other countries, he initiates the journey by applying for visa, which will cost him. After he acquries the visa, he will need to buy his necessary supplies he needs or even supplies that are not existing in other countries. Then he needs to pack-up and but the ticket for the airplane that is expensive, and at the airport, he should finally change his money to the destination country's currency. After the trip, he has surely spent more money than if he wanted to travel within his own country. Economical conditions of the foreign trips are surely suppressed than the adventures one can involve within his home country.
Finally, there are other reasons why a person should choose to go on a trip within his home country, rather than spending a lot of money or preparing for multiple consequenses that a foreign country is likely to cause in the passenger. In the last paragraphs, some of these arguments have been presented, claiming that traveling abroad is costly, harder, more risky, and communicating or interacting with people from other countries is not as easy as it can be within home countries. Consequently, I believe that it is better for everyone to visit their countries first, and if the have the possibility to visit abroad, it should not be prioritized after traveling inside. It is better to know and visit our home country first, and after that traveling to other places outside should be regarded.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 755, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a' or 'I'?
Suggestion: a; I
...ting with people, he gave me a call and a I reached my self to him and helped him t...
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Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'cheaper' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: cheaper
...eling inside our home county is usually more cheaper and economically frugal. The mutuality ...
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Line 3, column 911, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: Economic
...anted to travel within his own country. Economical conditions of the foreign trips are sur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for example, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2717.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 561.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8431372549 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71138405316 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452762923351 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 857.7 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1039492131 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.85 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.05 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283444994743 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100497088326 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616165973139 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204427792654 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545964077925 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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