Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country.
A small trip to a new place give us the opportunity to refresh ourself and enjoy our life. however, deciding where to go for the trip becomes a complicated issue.there are both positive and negative aspects of going to local or foreign destinations, which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, visiting a local site makes us aware of the culture of our homeland. A tour to a different region in the home country gives us the way to meet how different sections in our society live, what do they pursue for their living etc. Sometimes this can give the knowledge about how our ancestors live as we, the modern generation, has mostly forgotten or corrupted the age-long tradition. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. A few years before, when I was in school, I get a chance to visit a village. Initially, I was not much interested in going as for me the first thought which came to my mind was life full of inconvenience. however, when I reached there and started my exploration I was totally amazed by their rich culture, way of living and what traditions they follow. I get to experience many new things which helped me in changing my perspective about villages and get to know that all the traditions which we follow in the city have been altered by the modernization and the pristine form is only found in the villages. therefore, I believe that a journey to a local destination can teach a person number of things about his own society which, he might be unaware of.
however,visiting only destination within home country and claiming that our tradition is best is not a good option. our jaunts more often to local destination make our perspective provincial and we started thinking dogmatically. therefore, there is also the necessity for planning trips in a foreign site. For example, my uncle who was born and brought up in Europe always considered that principle followed in his country are superior to any other culture. he was also willing to argue if, anyone try to debunk him. however, when he visited us last summer in India he was completely shocked to see diverse forms of culture and each of them being superior to one another in different aspects. he tried to resist at first in believing but as he lived with us for more days, his perspective changed and he started respecting each section of the society. As a result, when he was returning he was completely changed man, as I can find him now being more pragmatic in his approach when one takes about him on the topic of cultures.
In conclusion, personally I believe that making a concrete choice is a difficult one deciding which location is better for travelling. this is because local destinations helps in making learn our own culture which has been modified by living in cities and because travelling to a foreign location preven t us from becoming a dogmatic and let us learn about different communities around the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, as for, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2439.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.763671875 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80576178503 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51953125 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0293897611 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.142857143 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.380952381 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0855253627632 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0235436004034 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02853671202 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0525460374547 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270864273201 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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