Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Physical exercise is more important to older people than to young people.
Nowadays, all ages of people workout by physical activity. It is so controversial that either young people or old people are more proper to do physical exercise. In my view, elderly people are more suitable than young people to exercise physically. They will live a longer life, communicate with others, and make the future vision of their grandchildren.
First, old people will achieve a long life through physical exercise. There is a high risk that elderly people have diseases by their death because they retire their job at average 65 and stay home to watch television, play a monopoly, and read books. Thus, they do not have opportunities by getting a healthy lifestyle. Consequently, they plan to walk outside, do cycling beside a river, practice golf. Therefore, their death rate is gradually improving sufficiently by workout.
In addition, physical exercise gives elderly people many chances to communicate with other people. When people are getting old, they feel so boring because of staying home and no opportunity to talk with someone. However, once old people go outside for walking, they are able to meet someone. Then, they can have conversations about social news, their grandchildren, and their hobbies with others. Therefore, their lifestyle will be more enjoyable compared with a previous life.
Thirdly, elderly people make the future vision of their grandchildren by physical workout. For example, young children are prior to hanging out with someone, so they invite their grandparents outside to play sports such as baseball, basketball, and soccer. Then, grandparents are able to give advise them how to play more profitable for each sport and talk about their history of failures. As a result, grandchildren accept keen future vision by them.
To sum up, I surely believe that it is more valuable for old people to exercise by physical than young people. They are able to attain beneficial such as long life, chances to communicate with someone and establishment of the future vision for their grandchildren.
- Some people think that some lessons for young children age 4 8 which include video games can serve as effective and interesting ways of learning while others think that these lessons are quite distracting and can be seen as a waste of time What is your op 40
- Some people think that some lessons for young children age 4 8 which include video games can serve as effective and interesting ways of learning while others think that these lessons are quite distracting and can be seen as a waste of time What is your op 60
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- Some people think that some lessons for young children age 4 8 which include video games can serve as effective and interesting ways of learning while others think that these lessons are quite distracting and can be seen as a waste of time What is your op 50
- Nowadays children rely too much on the technology like computers smart phone video games for fun and entertainment Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children s development 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24085365854 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81811398522 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521341463415 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3818438676 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.95 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282731276308 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108745035369 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106852366039 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200619241327 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113440403893 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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